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minus-squareZozano@aussie.zonelinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up9arrow-down1·edit-213 hours agoIMO, the second sentence feels like it’s cut off because I’m expecting an adjective at least, like: He gazed toward the elementary school with a glint in his eye. Or, As his gaze drifted toward the elementary school; his nose grew, as he muttered ‘I wouldn’t hurt them’. Though the one-sentence format is preferable for me.
IMO, the second sentence feels like it’s cut off because I’m expecting an adjective at least, like:
He gazed toward the elementary school with a glint in his eye.
Or,
As his gaze drifted toward the elementary school; his nose grew, as he muttered ‘I wouldn’t hurt them’.
Though the one-sentence format is preferable for me.