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    13 hours ago

    IMO, the second sentence feels like it’s cut off because I’m expecting an adjective at least, like:

    He gazed toward the elementary school with a glint in his eye.

    Or,

    As his gaze drifted toward the elementary school; his nose grew, as he muttered ‘I wouldn’t hurt them’.

    Though the one-sentence format is preferable for me.