So it’s framing if he doesn’t include in a tweet specific about the CDC and leave a side note that all of the efforts to find waste and such is a sham. Which would remove the focus on the topic about the kids, and isn’t necessary because most anyone is going to know he’s talking about the subject of the CDC being cut and how it affects this singular issue.
Not everything can include all subjects, that’s almost a form of Gish Galloping where everything is mentioned but nothing is talked about enough to matter.
I honestly reread it a few times before I replied to you, just to make sure I didn’t miss something. Since I’m sure we both agree that the cuts to the CDC that caused this denial of help is a travesty, how would you suggest he had worded things to both keep the attention on the danger to the kids while also “framing” it correctly to avoid what was clearly confusion to a few readers who apparently read between lines and saw his endorsement(???) of DOGE.
Except you’re not being direct in who is the problem. The second sentence doesn’t tell why the team is gone. The last part says “they” with the assumption the reader knows. I still don’t see the implicit allowance of DOGE actions that you do in the original, in fact using your reasoning your rewrite also allows the assumptions to creep in because it also doesn’t say other DOGE eliminations aren’t valid, it just says this part of the CDC was broken.
I do agree the tone of the rewrite is different. Whether or not it’s better is debatable, his last line plays the actions done as an absurdity in reality (which is what it is).
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So it’s framing if he doesn’t include in a tweet specific about the CDC and leave a side note that all of the efforts to find waste and such is a sham. Which would remove the focus on the topic about the kids, and isn’t necessary because most anyone is going to know he’s talking about the subject of the CDC being cut and how it affects this singular issue.
Not everything can include all subjects, that’s almost a form of Gish Galloping where everything is mentioned but nothing is talked about enough to matter.
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Which he did.
I honestly reread it a few times before I replied to you, just to make sure I didn’t miss something. Since I’m sure we both agree that the cuts to the CDC that caused this denial of help is a travesty, how would you suggest he had worded things to both keep the attention on the danger to the kids while also “framing” it correctly to avoid what was clearly confusion to a few readers who apparently read between lines and saw his endorsement(???) of DOGE.
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Except you’re not being direct in who is the problem. The second sentence doesn’t tell why the team is gone. The last part says “they” with the assumption the reader knows. I still don’t see the implicit allowance of DOGE actions that you do in the original, in fact using your reasoning your rewrite also allows the assumptions to creep in because it also doesn’t say other DOGE eliminations aren’t valid, it just says this part of the CDC was broken.
I do agree the tone of the rewrite is different. Whether or not it’s better is debatable, his last line plays the actions done as an absurdity in reality (which is what it is).
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