[MAN 2]: Heh, sometimes that’s just the way the cookie crumbles amigo…
MAN 2 cocks gun, smokes entire cigarette
[MAN 2]: and sometimes the cookie crumbles you… …
[MAN 2]: Heh, sometimes that’s just the way the cookie crumbles amigo…
MAN 2 cocks gun, smokes entire cigarette
[MAN 2]: and sometimes the cookie crumbles you… …
This is terrible, I can see that you’re going for “reversal of roles” as a theme with the cookie crumbling you, but you’re making it very difficult for us, the audience, to understand that symbology and follow along. Instead of that, I would suggest that you write it so that the cigarette turns into a person, rolls up MAN 2 and smokes him, followed by the gun turning into another person, cocking the cigarette which has smoked MAN 2 and then transforming again into MAN 2. That would make the scene much more readable.
MAN 2’s gimmick is that he smokes an entire cigarette before every kill, leaving the audience at a point of dramatic climax as they wait ten minutes for him to finish each joke before he shoots the criminal in the head.
If that’s the case, may I suggest that they also roll their own cigarettes and likes to have an amicable conversation with the victim to throw them off guard a little bit while doing it - they’re rolling that cigarette up until they go to lick the paper and then suddenly they’re giving a Kubrick stare to signify they have reached the peak of their derangement!
That’s the Happybadger Stare actually. In this movie I zoom in on his face staring into the camera to signify that he reached the peak of his derangement, that being each 10 minute~ cigarette sequence.
but maybe someone should send Mr. Kubrick an email and tell him to stop stealing trade secrets from the DPRS film industry !!